Children's book: story development

To continue my development with this project I needed to shorten the length of the text in the children's book. So for each page I trialed and errored and few scenarios and different wordings. 

Page 12 and 13 

Page 14 and 15 

Page 16 and 17

Page 18 and 19 

Page 20 and 21

Page 22 nd 23

Page 24 and 25 

Page 25 and 26

Page 27 and 28