Page 18 and 19: Black and white
Here's my new design for this page spread. I wanted it to look more sequential and have more interesting perspectives and angles. So, I decided to put turn the double page spread into smaller spot illustrations to fit on to page 18. I then designed a completely new page for 19. I think this looks more exciting for a child to look at. And to see the rhino in motion is dynamic and playful. It shows that rhino and Tan have made a connection. However, I might need to take out a few words from this page before I add colour.
Here's the version where I have shortened the sentences on this page to make it more concise. It looks a lot better and allows the illustrations to speak for themselves.
Page 20 and 21: Black and White
I haven't changed much of this new double page spread. Mainly because I thought the angle was already interesting. What I have changed is making the text more exciting. When a character shouts or something loud happens, like the rumbling. I want the audience to understand they should read it out loudly, so I made "Hey! Down there!!" Big to stimulate the audience and make it more enjoyable to read.
Page 22 and 23: Black and White
All that I changed on this double page spread is the text. I shortened it down. However, I want this page to mirror the page when Tan meets Rhino, so I need to make this illustration a spot illustration and add in a full page illustration and one extra spot illustration.
Here's the new version of this page. I prefer this as it's similar to the rhino page and the extra illustrations really add to the story. Like I have said previously, it shows hornbill and Tan creating a connection with each other. I also have shortened the words down even more, and I prefer this more. Before turning this into colour, I will take out a few words from page 23.
Page 24 and 25: Black and White
I haven't changed much for this double page spread. However because of the changes made to the previous page, I do believe it leads nicely on to this page. I have also shortened the text down further on this page.
Page 26 and 27: Black and White
Nothing much has changed on this page. Except the added word, "Splash!" This is because adding bigger and more playful text to a page can make it more engaging to the young reader. I also shortened some more of the text on page 27 to make it more concise, this is a theme that has happened throughout me redesigning the pages.
Page 28 and 29: Black and White
This page hasn't changed much at all. Apart from shortening the text, however, I do think it has made a big difference to the page.
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